12/26/2006

tanka 12.25.06

hey guy i need your opinons & comments about my tankas. i hope i am doing this right! enjoy! i wrote them last nite..
;-]

overcast breath
of a kiss
catching lovers' soul
oh i watch them
under that moon
~
broken silence
i speak out loud
but nobody hear me
except the stars
& maybe u
~
© Kai Croft

14 comments:

Aurora said...

Yes, these definitely are tanka, Kai. Good job! :)

floots said...

good ones kai
hope you've had a cool christmas
cheers

Poetry by Kai said...

yaaaa
i finally got it right....
& good at it...
thank u aa

Poetry by Kai said...

ty floots
i did have a cool xmas

samuru999 said...

lovely!
Very good, Kai!

Margie

polona said...

i like these, pp b-fly!
well done!

Pat Paulk said...

Kai, I'm not good at Eastern poetry but looks like you got the pivot just right!! Well done!!!

Poetry by Kai said...

ty guys

saby said...

saby said...
LOVE YOUR HEART

Kai
I GOT A LITTLE POEM FOR U:

a little star is u
share the spirit of light

u have wat it takes
u r a winner


i been making passes for u
God nos how long

wont u visit me?

December 26, 2006 8:11 PM

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

fine --- the 1st one is excellent!

Poetry by Kai said...

ty andrew

saby said...

y u ignoring me?
i am not a dirty old man Kai

i bathe evry morning and night

Poetry by Kai said...

ty saby
sorry i 4got

Anonymous said...

I love your words, Kai. I relate to them so much.