hey guy i need your opinons & comments about my tankas. i hope i am doing this right! enjoy! i wrote them last nite..
;-]
overcast breath
of a kiss
catching lovers' soul
oh i watch them
under that moon
~
broken silence
i speak out loud
but nobody hear me
except the stars
& maybe u
~
© Kai Croft
14 comments:
Yes, these definitely are tanka, Kai. Good job! :)
good ones kai
hope you've had a cool christmas
cheers
yaaaa
i finally got it right....
& good at it...
thank u aa
ty floots
i did have a cool xmas
lovely!
Very good, Kai!
Margie
i like these, pp b-fly!
well done!
Kai, I'm not good at Eastern poetry but looks like you got the pivot just right!! Well done!!!
ty guys
saby said...
LOVE YOUR HEART
Kai
I GOT A LITTLE POEM FOR U:
a little star is u
share the spirit of light
u have wat it takes
u r a winner
i been making passes for u
God nos how long
wont u visit me?
December 26, 2006 8:11 PM
fine --- the 1st one is excellent!
ty andrew
y u ignoring me?
i am not a dirty old man Kai
i bathe evry morning and night
ty saby
sorry i 4got
I love your words, Kai. I relate to them so much.
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